SHITBAGxDETON8R's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Final Destination'd]

Love it. Bloody whirligigs are a terror!

BigCronch responds:

the unstoppable horrors. thank you!

[Everyday's a Nice Day: Nosebleeds Suck.]

A very reasonable statement.

I think it could easily be enhanced with a couple visual gags, since there's a phone call you could do a cutaway to Bill with Tofu in the background causing some kind of trouble at the hospital, or some kind of implication of what Tofu did like a chalk outline of someone on the ground and police barriers. John could also be a little more active, slight movements of the phone, maybe the big reveal at the end could show his favorite chair all messed up... You know, just a smidge more. The bobbing of the tide of blood as further drops fell down was good, though.

Otherwise, it's alright. John's voice was pretty good, very appropriate for the situation. I wasn't going to watch the Minecraft movie anyway, so I suppose I watched this instead!

EverythingByElias responds:

Reasonable points dude! With this one I purposely focused more on John though what you say makes sense. As for adding more and more movement, again what you say is perfectly valid and constructive, a fair point! Thanks for the review and for not seeing the Minecraft movie! :D

[Some lore stuff for a new oc]

Well, I don't know much about flipaclip, but I can give you some general pointers;

1: The pacing is terrible. Things happen extremely quickly, and it's difficult to read the text on the screen in the split second it is there without pausing.

2: From the first point, if you are trying to convey information about your OC, having blocks of text is probably better in a format outside of video, like an art portal submission or blog post. Slow the pacing down, and add some kind of audio. Either tell a story via narration, or animate a story or pieces of it.

3: Most of your drawings are pretty basic. Right now the entire video is JUST the visuals, and several frames are just scribbles. Some are harsh white-on-black frames, others fairly dark lines on a harsh white background, and some are very dark with dark blue lines that aren't as clear or easy to pick out. There's a few frames of animation with the top hat-character (?) swaying back and forth, then it stops and opens a singular red eye on the center of the top area. That's not too bad, and has some potential to be visually striking, but then the arms (?) seem to change in shape from claws, to paddles, to hoops, to text, to a low-visibility frame where they're just noodles. You want some kind of consistency in your drawings first, then you can start worrying about smoothness.

You don't need to improve all of these at once, but if you want to show people something and receive a positive reaction you need to start from the top of the list and work your way down. Right now it's just 6 seconds of garbled pictures, if I look at the frames individually I can make out an attempt at a story, but it's missing a lot of chunks. Short and snappy can be fine for action or comedy, but if you want to share some kind of lore or deeper meaning you need to be a lot more deliberate.

I'm not trying to shit on a newbie, but if you genuinely want feedback I can give it. Animation is very difficult. I don't know what other options you have for software or tools.

0v0bfr responds:

Thank you for the info! I'll try making other animations in the future doing one by one!

[CHERNOBÃO SÔNICOOOOOO]

The premise and presentation wasn't so bad, but the loud crackling noises as part of the voice recordings made it pretty unwatchable. You desperately need to fix that if your intent is to entertain, not torment.

Nicolyarts responds:

sorry, but this video was inspired by another video from tiktok

[Pat and Ron's Bats and Scones]

These are still underrated IMO. There's a good flow to them, your characters are funny and dynamic, and the punchlines are often at the very least uncommon, or pretty original.

"That's what you get for having a wall!"

BigCronch responds:

thanks man! will keep at it anyway cause I do still enjoy it, I think I just need to make some at 1920x1080 and it'll help a bit more, cause I know on platforms like here and Youtube people would much rather prefer it.

[howd i do?]

The movement is okay, but there's no sound, it is VERY short, and it's mostly the same old Madness sprites everybody uses. You clearly have the basics down, so it should be pretty manageable for you to add a little more. Maybe some electronic music from the audio part of the site too!

smooth-Pb responds:

Thank you, ive been needing some criticism

[Everyday’s a Nice Day: Albatross.]

I definitely think the refinements are paying off in this one. The backgrounds and characters are distinct from one another, there's a bit of additional character animation where it matters to add expressiveness, and the timing and delivery works without any one part being grating or dragging on significantly. The ambience outdoors is a nice touch too - it helps the scene feel a bit more alive even during brief pauses. I appreciated the little details in the shot of the farm like the wires coming off the satellite dish.

For feedback, the only thing I can think of is relatability. Albatrosses are, indeed, freaky birds - but they're not very relatable, a lot of people have never seen one in their life, or at least not cared to study them very closely. I feel like the end bit where the dead albatross hits the ground could have the effect amplified with a brief super-detailed closeup similar to those Spongebob gags, after which Bill acknowledges that yeah, they are pretty freaky. Could help sell the punchline to the viewer, you know?

I guess another, less morbid/more family-friendly option could be to have the albatross be more of an actual character standing on the lawn, and Tofu repeatedly missing his shots (as Weebl once pointed out, cattle are not known for their dexterity and skill with weaponry) allowing Bill to complain about the noise, assess the albatross and maybe have it try to consume his head with its large beak, at which point Bill defeatedly does admit that indeed, they are freaky.

Overall a pretty solid improvement though!

EverythingByElias responds:

Thanks, I thought it was better too!

[Stay aware or else you'll get punched in the face...]

Damn. I was going to dumpster this, then the last 5 seconds happened and I was pretty impressed! You should do more with this!

T0bbit responds:

Oof! I'm glad you didn't lol. Thanks

[The Response Video]

Yeah, about right.

Pretty cool visuals and style, would be cool with some more frames here and there. The blood being a different art style from the rest was a neat choice. Nice and snappy at least.

Maybe the dancing pig would have been more poignant if it was bright pink on a neon green grass field to contrast against everything else being so monochrome? Kind of goes with the look of a lot of those crappy attention-grabbing videos, and the brightly colored buttons on the phone app. Just a thought.

DivanityRose responds:

Thank you.

I don't add that much colors because I want my animations to be in a monochromatic style,but making the pig's video in bright colors could have worked.

[OLD VHS haunted?]

Hmmm. Pretty alright. Didn't overstay its welcome, punchline was decent-to-good. Maybe Make the day 1 scene a little snappier, maybe some visual gag in the day 2 scene like some flickering to the lights to make it more eerie?

Not much to say about the visuals, very stylized and functional. The way you used the space was fine, some of it might be a bit too "dead" at points but I can't really think of any better way to do it either. Just about the only thing I think could be improved is the hole in the wall to make it mesh with the background a bit more, since the wall already has cracks drawn on with shading and highlights.

It just ticks all the boxes, but also doesn't really impress if that makes sense? I can't say anything truly bad about it, but also nothing extremely positive. I liked it, but didn't love it.

Comicdud responds:

Thank you for the thoughtful review! I really do appreciate the breakdown!