SHITBAGxDETON8R's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Maintenance Guy]

It was pretty good, a lot of the drawings were a bit too basic but I liked the mixed media animation with the maintenance guy. A couple tweaks here and there (I feel like the buttgremlin gag could probably have more of a punchline for example) and a little bit of polish on the backgrounds and other characters would go a long way.

[Police Cats: Stinkypinky]

Going by the naming conventions, this is clearly Stinkypinky.

The graphics are a bit rudimentary, but the animation is okay - up until the vocal segment, when it just was a slideshow. Not terrible but a bit too unfinished.

[Some lore stuff for a new oc]

Well, I don't know much about flipaclip, but I can give you some general pointers;

1: The pacing is terrible. Things happen extremely quickly, and it's difficult to read the text on the screen in the split second it is there without pausing.

2: From the first point, if you are trying to convey information about your OC, having blocks of text is probably better in a format outside of video, like an art portal submission or blog post. Slow the pacing down, and add some kind of audio. Either tell a story via narration, or animate a story or pieces of it.

3: Most of your drawings are pretty basic. Right now the entire video is JUST the visuals, and several frames are just scribbles. Some are harsh white-on-black frames, others fairly dark lines on a harsh white background, and some are very dark with dark blue lines that aren't as clear or easy to pick out. There's a few frames of animation with the top hat-character (?) swaying back and forth, then it stops and opens a singular red eye on the center of the top area. That's not too bad, and has some potential to be visually striking, but then the arms (?) seem to change in shape from claws, to paddles, to hoops, to text, to a low-visibility frame where they're just noodles. You want some kind of consistency in your drawings first, then you can start worrying about smoothness.

You don't need to improve all of these at once, but if you want to show people something and receive a positive reaction you need to start from the top of the list and work your way down. Right now it's just 6 seconds of garbled pictures, if I look at the frames individually I can make out an attempt at a story, but it's missing a lot of chunks. Short and snappy can be fine for action or comedy, but if you want to share some kind of lore or deeper meaning you need to be a lot more deliberate.

I'm not trying to shit on a newbie, but if you genuinely want feedback I can give it. Animation is very difficult. I don't know what other options you have for software or tools.

0v0bfr responds:

Thank you for the info! I'll try making other animations in the future doing one by one!

[CHERNOBÃO SÔNICOOOOOO]

The premise and presentation wasn't so bad, but the loud crackling noises as part of the voice recordings made it pretty unwatchable. You desperately need to fix that if your intent is to entertain, not torment.

Nicolyarts responds:

sorry, but this video was inspired by another video from tiktok

[Pat and Ron's Bats and Scones]

These are still underrated IMO. There's a good flow to them, your characters are funny and dynamic, and the punchlines are often at the very least uncommon, or pretty original.

"That's what you get for having a wall!"

BigCronch responds:

thanks man! will keep at it anyway cause I do still enjoy it, I think I just need to make some at 1920x1080 and it'll help a bit more, cause I know on platforms like here and Youtube people would much rather prefer it.

[Worried about Kanye]

Alright, these are a bit odd and clearly not targeted at me with all the pop culture references, but the line about reading the "white man's bible" got me, that was funny. I think the more bite-sized runtime helps all the references (guest characters?) not overstay their welcome.

[Porosty - Pies HD]

I have no idea what's going on, but it was great.

[howd i do?]

The movement is okay, but there's no sound, it is VERY short, and it's mostly the same old Madness sprites everybody uses. You clearly have the basics down, so it should be pretty manageable for you to add a little more. Maybe some electronic music from the audio part of the site too!

smooth-Pb responds:

Thank you, ive been needing some criticism

[madness horsefication]

You know, it might be stupid garbage, but it was pretty snappily animated and unusual. There are so many of these that are just the same old madness sprites clunkily going at it, the use of the photorealistic horse and the original sprite for the guy getting stomped made it a lot funnier than it otherwise would have been. So, fair's fair, it could have been no value trash, but it wasn't. Nice first try?

[Everyday’s a Nice Day: Albatross.]

I definitely think the refinements are paying off in this one. The backgrounds and characters are distinct from one another, there's a bit of additional character animation where it matters to add expressiveness, and the timing and delivery works without any one part being grating or dragging on significantly. The ambience outdoors is a nice touch too - it helps the scene feel a bit more alive even during brief pauses. I appreciated the little details in the shot of the farm like the wires coming off the satellite dish.

For feedback, the only thing I can think of is relatability. Albatrosses are, indeed, freaky birds - but they're not very relatable, a lot of people have never seen one in their life, or at least not cared to study them very closely. I feel like the end bit where the dead albatross hits the ground could have the effect amplified with a brief super-detailed closeup similar to those Spongebob gags, after which Bill acknowledges that yeah, they are pretty freaky. Could help sell the punchline to the viewer, you know?

I guess another, less morbid/more family-friendly option could be to have the albatross be more of an actual character standing on the lawn, and Tofu repeatedly missing his shots (as Weebl once pointed out, cattle are not known for their dexterity and skill with weaponry) allowing Bill to complain about the noise, assess the albatross and maybe have it try to consume his head with its large beak, at which point Bill defeatedly does admit that indeed, they are freaky.

Overall a pretty solid improvement though!

EverythingByElias responds:

Thanks, I thought it was better too!